如何写出中考英语高分作文

　　一、写作决窍

　　总体把握，要点齐全；人称时态，逻辑清楚；

　　关键词汇，动词第一；组词成句，结构完整；

　　组句成文，连词增色；此路不通，绕道迂回；

　　字迹工整，留好印象；从句适量，高分有望。

　　二、写作步骤

　　1.认真审题。审题包括要点、格式、词数以及此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息，告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。

　　2.确定文体和时态。确定文体后，根据不同文体的特点和要求进行组织材料；同时确定出该篇文章的总时态与时态的变化。

　　3.写完要点，但不随意发挥。

　　4.先草稿，后抄写。

　　三、习作点评

　　[2004年全国中学生英语能力竞赛初赛初三组] (14分)

　　Choose one of your hobbies and write an article¹ for the school magazine² about it. Tell the magazine readers³.

　　·What exactly⁴ your hobby is;

　　·When and how you became⁵ interested⁷ in this hobby;

　　·Why you enjoy your hobby;

　　·About your hopes⁹ and plans¹¹ for the future¹².

　　写作要求：

　　1.根据所提供的内容，适当拓展想象空间，灵活地将提供的信息体现在文章中。

　　2.条理清楚，语句通顺，书写清晰、规范。

　　3.词数60-80.

　　[学生习作A]

　　My hobby is read books①.When I was¹³ seven years old.I became interested in reading¹⁶ books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful¹⁷ things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge¹⁸ from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person¹⁹.Books even¹⁵ can solve²⁰ many problems²¹ for me.I will read more good books to improve²² myself²³.

　　①改为reading books，动词作表语时应该用动名词。

　　②also的位置应放在can之后。

　　[点评]：档次9-11分。

　　①要点不全，漏掉最后一个要点。

　　②句子基本无误，能正确传递信息给读者但文章不流畅，句子与句子之间过渡不自然，给读者感觉在回答上述问题。

　　③有少量错误。

　　[学生习作B]

　　My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable²⁴.When I was young ,my mother used²⁵ to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books,I can enjoy the beautiful sentences²⁶.At the same time I can improve my writing²⁷.I want to be a writer²⁸ in the future,so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream²⁹ can come true³⁰.

　　①开门见山、点题。

　　②真情流露，理由充分。

　　③文中带圈的连词使用得恰当，使文章过渡自然、

　　④巧妙使用句型以表决心。

　　[点评]：档次13-14分。

　　①清楚表达写作目的，要点齐全。

　　②语言表达灵活多样，字里行间流露出真情实感，文章有感染力。

　　③恰当使用连词和从句，语言流畅，且无错误，是一篇高质量的作文。

　　[高分突破]

　　①文体：记叙文。

　　②要点：what → when →how → why → hope⁸ and plan¹⁰ for the future.

　　③时态：一般现在时，一般过去时，一般将来时的自然变化。

　　内容具有开放性，但它也是“控制性”的写作试题，因此不能随意发挥，要善于抓信息，写完要点。选用这两篇学生真实习作，一是因为他们选材相同，二是因为他们都是英语成绩优秀的同学。同学B灵活使用连词so…that,so,little by little,when,so that等，恰到好处地使用新句型和短语used to,became interested in,come true……等，使内容丰富，读起来优美流畅。其实这些表达同学A也会，只是缺乏技术加工。通过这两篇作文点评，同学们便能悟出其中的奥妙。

　　四、培养途径

　　1.根据老师布置的写作内容，独立完成一篇写作。

　　2.与同伴合作，交流自己的写作，通过交流找出各自作文中写得好的地方和优美的句子，合作创造一篇新的文章，供大家欣赏。

　　3.找老师点评，请求老师指点，尤其是怎样润色。

　　4.自己纠错，写下反思。

　　五、备考演练

　　A

　　缙云山是重庆著名的游览胜地，每天有大量的游客。请你根据下面提供的信息写一篇报道，说明现在的游客在环境保护方面的变化。

　　写作要求：

　　1.词数在100左右。

　　2.条理清楚，语句通顺。

　　3.开头已写好，但不计入总词数。

　　Jinyun Mountain is a famous³¹ place of interest⁶ …

　　B

　　阅读电视广告词：“If we don’t save³² water,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.”根据提示，写一篇60-80词的短文。

　　提示：

　　1.生活离不开水。

　　2.可饮用水在减少。

　　3.水污染严重。

　　4.应保护水源，再利用水。

　　思路点拨与参考答案

　　A. [思路点拨]：

　　①文体：记叙文。

　　②时态：一般过去时态，一般现在时态。采用正反对比的写作手法，增加感染力。

　　③写作目的：告诉读者保护环境的重要性。

　　Jinyun Mountain is a famous place of interest.Every day a lot of tourists³³ come here to enjoy its beauty³⁴. But a few³⁵ years ago,some of them paid³⁶ no attention³⁷ to protecting³⁹ the environment⁴⁰.They threw their rubbish⁴¹,such as¹⁴ plastic⁴² bags,fruit skins⁴³ and waste⁴⁴ paper on the ground⁴⁵.Sometimes they broke⁴⁶ trees,picked flowers and killed⁴⁷ birds. Some even made⁴⁸ fires in the woods to cook food.How dangerous it was.Luckily,great changes have taken place here.Tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins,and they are doing their best to protect³⁸ the birds and plants as well.They bring their own⁴⁹ meals⁵⁰ instead⁵¹ of cooking⁵² to prevent⁵³ starting a forest⁵⁴ fire in the mountains.All these changes make us very happy.

　　B. [思路点拨]：

　　①夹叙夹议(说明现状，谈谈感想)。

　　②时态：一般现在时态。

　　③广告词的含义——水很重要，应保护和再利用(写作意图)。

　　Water is very important⁵⁵ to humans⁵⁶.We can’t live without water.The water we can drink is falling.But some people don’t seem⁵⁷ to care⁵⁸ about it.They waste a lot of water.They pour⁵⁹ dirty water into rivers and lakes.Water pollution⁶⁰ is getting more and more serious⁶¹.So we must do something to stop the pollution.We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse⁶² it.If we don’t do this,the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.